Evernight: Prologue

Posted: January 24, 2013 in Evernight, Personal Projects
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This is the prologue of my current work in progress, which I am almost certain will be called Evernight. It’s pretty cryptic I know, but I intend to reveal more about the story and characters in future posts. Enjoy!

Prologue

In the darkened room, silence hung everywhere in great black sheets, deadening even the slightest sound. However, an even stranger sensation captured the attention. An acute sense of waiting, of expectancy, permeated the air like a thick fog just waiting for a gust of wind to banish the uncertainty. It was an almost palpable pressure, pressing in from all sides like water at great depth. In it, there was something else, something—

Venezio awoke with a start, the fog dissipating. It had been only a flicker; a faint light just beginning to grow in strength. He had been so close; he had actually felt it, felt him, for he was sure now that it was a male child. He had the vaguest sense of his location; just enough to know that he was close, Manhattan, probably somewhere in the upper west side. That would have to suffice, because he had sensed something else. They had felt him to, and they were closing in. He knew it would be a race now, a race to find him, to keep him from them. He had sensed power, great power in him; there could hardly be a mistake as to the fact that he was the One, the one they had sought for so long. They would be bold now, now that he was almost within their grasp. Venezio knew that the child would almost certainly shift the balance of power in the war, the balance of power in the world, indeed on many worlds. There was no time to lose.

Standing up from the bed, he drew the silence back into himself, and the room lightened. The usual city ambiance resumed as normal: the hum of engines, crunch-slosh of tires and boots in the dirty snow, and the distant beep of a truck in reverse, backing into a loading bay drifted in through the open window. Venezio frowned, shutting it. He turned, his dark leather coat splaying out behind him as he did so. Then he descended the dusty hotel stairs and drove into the night. It had begun.

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Comments
  1. rayadd says:

    Well, you win for most cryptic prologue ever. I like it, though. A lot. It seems like it’s set in a futuristic time, or at least a time that doesn’t seem current. The mood is set perfectly with just these simple actions by one character. And in the middle of the second paragraph, did you mean “they had felt him TOO?” That just stuck out to me. But this is a really good, substantial intro to a story. Definitely leaves the reader wanting more, especially with the descriptions of the city and the character’s thoughts/dream.

    EAMON, NO.
    I ended MY prologue to one of my stories with “It had begun.”
    Not cool.

    Anyway, really looking forward to reading more. Get on it.

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